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Structural Dreaming

Another step into the right direction,
You watch yourself as goddess of the kin.
Another turn to misconception,
I'm ripping carefully your skin.
  
You try to scream forbidden words
Envisioning ecstatic sins.
A prayer to the pagan lords...
I'm touching now your inner strings.

The bleeding wax is deconstructing realms
By binding torture in the clash.
Rebirth is near and then it dreams
The elevated clergy of the flesh.
My very first submission for *AsThouWilt

Hope you enjoy it.
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LiMeStA Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2005   Photographer
never really liked poety but found myself moving towards the screen as i read this one :o

dont know anything about poety so cant give any critique :D
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forbiddensnowflake Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2005
your ideas are good, and the flow is fine, some of the phrases etc are a little awkward and such, but it's generally a good piece :)
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