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the failed hopes

they dreamt of better worlds
that failed to come alive
they messed the holy word
and made us  as one kind

the prison of their soul
was once a cry for freedom
their crafted worker class
is just a petty anthem

the bloody flag that struck so many chords
has turned the mighty wolves into a herd of sheep
i hate them with my puny grief
for they have made  the mighty dream
as cruel as my belief
this is the kind of poetry i thought i'd never make,it talks about the communism its dreams and its failures ,it was heavily inspired by this picture: [link]
hope you like it
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demonlight Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2004  Professional Writer
Well crafted - interesting concept as well. Only one percievable fault and that is with 'sheeps' - ^_^ it should read 'sheep', since 'sheep' has no plural. In any case, the rest of the poem is very good.
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poetry-of-hate Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2004
thank you for your kind comment,i corrected the mistake *blushes*...and i thought i knew english
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ecstremista Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2004   Photographer
poezia nu e grozava. te intreb daca ai tradus-o in engleza prima data. nu aduce nimic prea nou. poate te gandesti sa imbunatatesti exprimarea.
the prison of their soul
este un exemplu suficient pentru a demonstra ca s-a mai trecut odata pe aici. astept insa sa iti citesc si celelelte lucrari.
felicitari meriti pentru curaj. nu e usor sa-ti postezi "ruinele cavernoase".
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poetry-of-hate Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2004
cred ca ai dreptate... oricum asta a fost prima incercare la un subiect de genul asta...mi s-a cam acrit sa tot vorbesc despre tortura sufletului meu :)
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